Wednesday, November 28, 2012

Se7en Deadly Sins vs The Lost Room #3

The hatred runs deep...deep into my veins...coursing through my flesh and bone.  Boiling my blood and churning my flesh.  There is no end, means or reasons for my internal hate.  It is as much apart of me as the blistering sun is as part of the sky.  It has resided in me since the birth of my existence.  My life has flowed with the ebb of it lust for blood.  Smouldering amongst a whirl wind of acrid smoke and anger.  Inwards I direct it towards the damnation of my soul.  Unleashing my eternal hell through the end of barrel.  Leaving nothing behind but the legacy of my wrath.

The myth the sanity that I left behind is the stranger who shares the bed in my room.  A bitter old baster who drags me down into the filth of his mind.  Corrupting and twisting the visions of my work into the images that fester behind his skull.  I try to pay it no heed but its' twisted ways contort the fate of my free will.  Alone I am left with nothing.  Together we possess the power to melt and corrupt the entire imperium.  
The essence of this model was captured within the visage that came before my very eyes.  Straight from the depths of purgatory itself.  This is but the first step of many for the inner workings of my mind continue to grind away at the stone.  Lacking an inner fortitude of chaos it sits in a limbo of its own making.  Waiting and fester away at both our souls.  My wrath begins to boil.


  1. Hey there, just thought I'll give a bit of constructive criticism on your writing style. I can see what you're trying to do with the vocabulary, but honestly speaking you seem to lack the finesse to make it flow nicely. The sentences are choppy, and most of the bombastic vocabulary seem to be added in just for the sake of it, making it extremely difficult to read. The concept of the models are great, but frankly utilising this writing style is kinda letting that down. Perhaps instead you might want to consider talking about the model itself? This is a hobby blog after all.

  2. Normally I have just been using this stylized writing for my introductions. For this series I wanted to go beyond that and express myself in the same fashion. It allows me to explore the origins and fluff that I want to establish behind each of my models. I do realize that it is not for everyone but at the same time it is for others. This series will continue to shed its' skin in the same manner. My other post however will go back to my old formula. This should meet my needs, your wants and that of others as well.

  3. Well, I understand you have to cater to other readers too, but your posts don't contain any reference to the model itself in the sense of modelling (Not sure if I'm making any sense here). This means that in your bid to cater to one group, you neglect another. This is fine if both are mutually exclusive, but you can always use the stylized writing for one part and the talk about the model in another part, thereby catering to both groups.